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Tips for Concision: 6. Deflate compound prepositions

Deflate compound prepositions.

Compound prepositions are prepositions on steroids. Instead of being concise and simple, they’re puffed up, like for the purpose of, by means of, and with reference to.

In Plain English for Lawyers, Richard Wydick says they “suck the vital juices from your writing.” He offers some of his least favorites: by virtue of, in relation to, and with a view toward. And in The Grammatical Lawyer, Morton Freeman calls them “drawn-out prepositional phrases” (an apt name). He particularly dislikes during the course of, in terms of, and on the part of.

They’re almost always unnecessary, so deflate them. For example, the compound prepositions in the next sentence can be easily shortened to one word:

  • The attorney spoke to Chris Santiago with regard to (about) the cease-and-desist letter in order to (to) learn its content.

Put them on your editing checklist.

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The wisdom of a fortune cookie–UPDATE

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UPDATE: The advice on the fortune is from William Zinsser, a noted writing expert and author of a really good book called On Writing Well, which I recommend. I’ve also learned that many others have received this fortune as far back as 2009. Wow.

After a lovely meal of Spicy Basil Fried Rice, I opened my fortune cookie and found this:

Four

What a surprise. It’s the most unusual but most appropriate fortune I’ve ever seen.

Visiting Scholar at Arizona State–O’Connor

I am honored to be invited to be a Legal Communication & Rhetoric Visiting Scholar at Sandra Day O’Connor College of Law—Arizona State University on November 7-8, 2013.

The visit and my two lectures while there are made possible by support from ALWD through a grant to support the Legal Communication & Rhetoric Visiting Scholars Program.

More information here.

LeClercq’s book on Prison Grievances

I’ve been reading an inspired and fascinating book by my friend and former colleague, Terri LeClercq. She’s a nationally known legal-writing expert, and she’s written a graphic novel that teaches inmates how to think through a jail or prison problem and then write a grievance about it. It’s called

Prison Grievances: When to Write. How to Write

Please read it and recommend it to anyone you know who is incarcerated.

Get more information here.